The advantages provided by English as a“global language”will continue to out-
weigh the disadvantages.To what extent do you agree with the statement?
lt is obviously that English has became a core component of the world，which
brings some demerits at the same time.From my point of view，we should hold (
拥有长远的眼光，可以用embrace)a long-term eyesight to analyze this issue.
Hence l strongly believe English will bring positive impacts outweigh(一个句子中
两个动词，可以改成bring more positive impacts than negative ones) passive influ-
ences continually.
There is little doubt that English dominants the world，which effects(注意词性，
effect是名词，affects才是动词)global economyfundamentally and indirectly.
Therefor(注意拼写，therefore) , escaping from the international development is
unrealistic.Apart from this，in(注意搭配)recent decades，there is an increasing
needs(注意数的一致性，an要跟单数，there is an increasing need) for those who
what to entertain themselves prefer traveling to other countries.(整句话是一个错
误的句子，可以改为 those，who want to entertain themselves，prefer to travel in
other nations) Mastering the global language will benefit them a lot.For instance
,tourists can ask local residents for some helps (help是不可数名词，去掉s)of di-
rections in English，which is more efficient and effective.Moreover，the majority
of significant texts book and journals are English version. In addition，according to
the scientist research，those bilingual individuals are(没有谓语动词)more likely to
understand their fist language deeply.
Nevertheless，this trend is not without its drawbacks.First of all，learning English
well in(没有谓语动词，in改成is) not a(注意冠词的使用，an)easy thing to achieve
,especially for those seniors.However，we can froster(foster注意拼写问题)our
offsprings to study English when they are young.Besides，it will pose a threat to
those languages which used via mini proportion of people(这个定语从句就比较多
余，直接用minor languages即可).However，if we can keep a balance between
the native language and English，we can learn better simultaneously .
In conclusion，taking some necessary measures can avoid the tragic(这个词用得
比较过了)happening.From the long-term angle，Istill insist English as a 'global
language'will bring us considerable merits more than drawbacks.
TR6.0+CC6.0 +V5.0 +G5.0= O5.5
问题︰语法问题还是比较多，词性，句子没有谓语的情况，冠词的使用等。除此之外，表
达也不够准确，比如用词。有些表达也比较多余。
建议∶可以系统的学习一下语法，梳理一下各种语法知识点，多读原版杂志。
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